Let’s practise blending quotes seamlessly into our own sentences

Never just drop the quote into the paragraph – always work it in seamlessly.

For example:
Brian was exposed to the elements and he “knew he had to do something. He couldn’t just sit at the bottom of the tree and stare down at the lake for four days” so he did what survivors do; he built a shelter (p.43). He searched a ridge line for  a small hollow and found one. Later, after a painful encounter with a porcupine that filled him with “new waves of self-pity” that  made him cry “until he was cried out”, he improved the shelter with “heavier logs and fastened several of them across the opening, wedging them at the top and burying the bottoms in the sand” (p.65, 107). It took three days to complete, again showing tenacity and determination, the key elements of survivors.
NOW: Practise this technique by writing a paragraph with quotes – draw on the issue your thesis is arguing.
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  1. Chocolate is the best thing in the world. It is a ” worderful world of delight” (Hotel Chocolate,n.d,1). I have 10 bars when I get home I have 10 bars because it is” the best thing in the world” ( Bill choco,12.12.12,1). “It is made off all the good things in life” ( Alfie Neate,11.11.11,100).

  2. Professor John Steven said “The environment is being destroyed by the logging industry” at the UN meeting in 1998( Johnson, 12th march 1999, P1). The information gathered at the UN meeting was described as “mind blowing” from Jessica Robs ( Smith, 17 June 1998, p1).

  3. NASA’s space program should be resumed because there are could help us survivmany things the human race could benefit. ‘considering the size of our galaxy, there is a lot of things we don’t know about’ (Wonka, 2012, p.165). ‘There could be life on other planets unexplored by humans, of which could help us survive the apocalypse of the earth’ (Stig, 2021, p.1986). ‘ I want aliens to do my homework’ (randomkid, 2021, p.0)

  4. Home work is taking up too much of student’s time. Professor Malcolm of University of Queensland said “Home work is unnecessary, no one should do it”, if a professor says it true, than it is (Cook, 2012, p. 57). People need to relax, an expert of relaxation stated “Home work needs to be abolished so students can relax” (Blake, 2010, p. 444).

  5. ‘’Chocolate is making people fat ‘’ (Smith, Health Director of Australia, 2012, 1). People are using the excuse of feeling sad and eating chocolate but in reality ‘’they’re eating themselves fat’’ (Jones Personal trainer, 2011).

  6. Chocolate is healthy for humans in small amounts. Eating chocolate releases endorphins in the human brain which changes the emotional state of a human. Professor William James says “chocolate can improve the mental state of a human” which is why chocolate in small amounts is healthy (Manly, 11/2/09, p.1). Not only can chocolate improve a human’s mental state but also “reduce the risk of cancer and heart diseases” (Kenth, 7/8/07, p.5) Chocolate is actually good for us and so it should able to be sold in tuckshops.

  7. BETTER VERSION:
    Chocolate is healthy for humans in small amounts. Eating chocolate releases endorphins in the human brain which changes the emotional state of a human. Professor William James says “chocolate can improve the mental state of a human” which is why chocolate in small amounts is healthy (Manly, 11/2/09, p.1). Not only can chocolate improve a human’s mental state but also “reduce the risk of cancer and heart diseases” (Kenth, 7/8/07, p.5). Chocolate is actually good for us and so it should able to be sold in tuckshops.

  8. Mrs. Smith told the class “I am the best at English” (Mrs. Smith is awesome, p. 69). Mrs. Smith said that her hair “flows like the waves of the glistening blue sea” and the class nodded in agreement so she wouldn’t give them detentions (Mrs. Smith’s hair, p. 54).

  9. Sports betting should be banned across Australia. Many people are “taking a leap against gambling” and supporting the prohibiting of sport betting and gambling (Phelan, p.1). Even sports superstar Lance Franklin has “started to show initiative” against betting and gambling (McGugan, p.1). As the “rise against sports betting” continues, many annual gamblers are beginning to give up their addictions, and, as a result, “save up to hundreds of dollars” (Carter, p.1).

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      Sports betting should be banned across Australia. Many people are “taking a leap against gambling” and supporting the prohibiting of sport betting and gambling (Phelan, 4/1/12, p.1). Even sports superstar Lance Franklin has “started to show initiative” against betting and gambling (McGugan, 19/8/11, p.1). As the “rise against sports betting” continues, many annual gamblers are beginning to give up their addictions, and, as a result, “save up to hundreds of dollars” (Carter, 28/12/08, p.1).

  10. Sports are very important for people to stay healthy. The presedent of America once thought “exercising is very important if you want to have a happy life. More Americans need to take that advice” (Obama, march 9th, p.14). People who eat too much too often feel sorry for theirselves and they need to build self confidence. “You will not attract anyone to get married, if you are fat” (Chinese dictator, January 14, p.14).

  11. Improved version
    Mrs. Smith told the class “I am the best at English” (Mrs. Smith is awesome, 01/01788, p. 69). Mrs. Smith said that her hair “flows like the waves of the glistening blue sea” and the class nodded in agreement so she wouldn’t give them detentions (Mrs. Smith’s hair, 05/12/1572, p. 54).

  12. Sleep is important for teenagers in high school.According to Professor Salvatore “Our children need more sleep, the brain cannot function without it” (Salvatore, nd, p.5). Without sleep, teenagers begin to fall behind in class because they are catching up on sleep. Doctor B.Stewart has done many reasearch of this and found the result of this ” If teenagers do not sleep then they began to develop mental issues, these teenagers do not deserve this!” (Stewart, Nd, Pg.7).

  13. “Nuclear bombs will blow up the world one day and that will be the end of it” said Professer john ( John,2007, pg23) Also porved by the Instatution of Nuclear Bombs ” One day just one chemical reaction will trigger the whole world to explod” (INB, 2008)

  14. 1. Phillip decided that he would “declare tuesdays as a school free day.” (Stienke,14/03/2012, Pg,30092)

    2. Phillip also declared that he would “bann school on wednesdays.” (Stienke,14/03/2012, Pg,30091)

  15. Sand mining on Stradbroke island is seriously affecting the local community because “there are about 2000 permanent residents and 145 of them work in the mines”(bligh,2012,p.1). mining on Stradbroke island has “taken away their livelihoods overnight” and it “ would leave a massive scar on the village community”(bligh,2012,p.1).

  16. Should we send people to Mars?

    To transport Astronauts to Mars you will need, a supply of enough food, water and importantly oxygen. You also need to think about transport, safety, enough room to move around.” This project will cost billions, is it worth the cost.’’ Even before we begin to think about supplies, we need to know how to travel there and back. The greatest challenge for scientist is not to travel to Mars but, how to travel home. ‘’ So for the Astronauts it could be a one way ticket” (Smith, 2009, p.1).

  17. Exposure to violent video games may increase aggressive and hostile feelings of the players; while they are interacting with friends, teachers, or adults. These video games also decrease compassionate for others with whom they interact. “Video games have affected children at the age of 4 all the way to 45 years old adults and they have influenced others, such as social environment, family background and peer pressure cause aggressive behaviour.”(Alberts, 2008, p.1)

  18. Detentions should become illegal. Professer R.J. Lupin has today claimed that school detention is “a unessicary and horrible waste of the time of both the children and the teacher, I [Lupin] have been conducting studies and have proven that detention has no effect on a student” (Proffesser R.J. Lupin 30/2/2012). It isn’t only professers that are saying this many students are hournoring Professer Lupin and his research. Education minister, Cornelous Fudge, has called this ground breading research “Compleate rubbish, and holds as much truth as this candy bar” (Daily Prophet 9/3/2012).

  19. “Watching to much television is bad for kids.” (Bridges, 2009, p.3) It makes them fat, lazy and unhelpfull. “It isnt healthy to watch more than two hours of television each day.” (Jones, 2011, p.2) Parents should be made to make sure their child does not watch more than two hours each day.

  20. 1. He “knew that McDonalds was bad for your body” but continued to eat it because it was yummy (Jacobs, 12.3.12, p.87).
    2. “Nuclear Power is bad for many reasons,” although for years nobody has done anything about it (Loiks, 30.8.12, p.78).

  21. “Green means clean,” according to Mr McGee, nuclear power enthusiast. He states that “without nuclear power, the world will become a sick, twisted place,” (McGee, 02/12/57) Despite the fact that people have called him a “crazy baffoon”, he stands by his statements (Newspaper United, 2157, P.99390).

  22. “Ice-cream is very addictive and is an unhealthy food” (Jimbo, 2012) and should therefore be illegal in Australia. It poses a problem and “Is very expensive” (Baloney, 2984). Because it is unhealthy, ” It causes many sicknesses like the Ice-cream pox and Ice-creamgitis.” (Lom, 2364).

  23. 1. He thought “life just isn’t going right” (Jake 12.12.12, p.1234)
    2. Ms Smith always liked to say “time is money” (Ms Smith 23.1.12, p.3)

  24. In todays society over sixty per cent of Australian school students are suffering due to a lack of sleep. ” Sleep is an essential element in maintaining a balanced liestyle” and vital for the mental and emotional health of students (Wacker, 2002, p.64). The students aren’t receiving enough sleep “due to the constant demands of school work” and assignments. This is a serious issue that is yet to be resolved.

  25. School should be banned in everywhere. It has been proven that it “harms the learning capacity of children under the age of 99” (Mr. Dr. Prof. Wo-Man, 2000, page 29999). It has been proven “that not going to school helps the mind learn” Mr. Dr. Prof. Wo-Man also says ” im a short man.>.>) Mr. Dr. Prof. Wo-Man, 200 page 99999?

  26. Sleep is important for all teenagers in high school; they should be getting at least eight hours of sleep a night with all the stress going through school. “Sleep is food for the brain. During sleep, important body functions and brain activity occur. Skipping sleep can be harmful” (Smith, nd, pg. 12). Surgeon Smith has found out that “If teenagers don’t get enough sleep they can undergo mental issues” (Hansen, nd, pg. 7)

  27. Homework should be banned “because of many reasons, as kids after school need to have rest, if they have too much homework after school on top of assignments and other commitments there brains don’t get enough rest”(Dr. Junior Strawberry, 2011, p.322). This is why homework should be banned.

  28. Too much homework can lead to “obesity, heart disease and other bad health issues” (Blueberry, 2012, p.29). Children need to get outside and use there body, kids can not do this is they are caged inside doing homework. This is why homework should be demolished in schools around the world.

  29. Obesity is a serious and ongoing problem. “In Australia, more than 17 million Australians are overweight or obese” (Monash Obesity and Diabetes Institute, 2011). Obesity can lead to many health problems, such as heart disease and diabetes. “Obesity has become the single biggest threat to public health in Australia.” (Monash Obesity and Diabetes Institute, 2011).

  30. Sport is a great way to keep active, “many people in the world today are lazy and do not participate in sport,” (Changuion, 2012, p.985). The Many people who do not take part in sport have a higher chance of obesity. Dr Changuion states, “Sport is a fun way to keep active,” (Changuion, 2012, p.57). Every person should participate in at least one sport to keep healthy.

  31. Ant-rid should not be used in homes. This is because “it is a highly dangerous poision” and can kill many things(Block, 2011, p. 99). I’m sure that I don’t want my pets to die from ant poison. “Ants are very clean and eat little crumbs that we have left” and play a very important part of the ecosystem of our houses’ (Spider, 1986, p. 55). Do you really want to murder poor, innocent ants that are only trying to help us?

  32. Chocolate is “yummy compared to any other dessert” (Smith, 2007, p.1). “The mix of cocoa and milk is delicious” Belgian chocolate is the finest of brews in the world (Smith, 2007, p.1). Many large companies include “Cadbury and Nestle which are the most commended chocolatiers in the country” (Weldon, 2012, p.87).

  33. Homework should be banned in schools globally. It has been scientifically tested that “It can cause stress to your minds” (Dr Evil, 2101, p.24.3). Homework takes up time that student need to relax and play sport after school. It has also been proved that “It can make students more tried for school the next day went they have a lot of homework” (Bob, 200BC, p.675).

  34. Chocolate isn’t only yummy, it also can improve your emotional state. However some Doctors do not agree with this saying that “it is an unhealthy substance turning our communities obese “(Dr Smith, 2011, p.1). This is true yet the problem isn’t with the chocolate, “in the modern day we are relying too much on chocolate to provide comfort and help resolve our emotional issues leading to over consumption” (Professor Amylin, 2012, p.6). In conclusion a balanced assessment shows that chocolate is good for us if we consume it wisely and don’t allow it to become an emotional addiction which drives excessive eating.

  35. There is research being held that is trying to prove that eating chocolate good for you and could be cutting risk of heart disease, diabetes and stroke. Victoria Taylor, Senior Heart Health Dietitian at the British Heart Foundation, said: “We can’t start advising people to eat lots of chocolate based on this research”, as the research is not saying to go and eat lots of chocolate, because this will just make you obiese, instead it should be eaten in moderate amounts. (Taylor, 2011).

  36. Obesity is a medical condition which can “lead into reduced life expectancy and/or increased health problems.” (Reagent, 2010, p.1). In Australia obesity has been described as an epidemic with increasing frequency. It has been proven that obesity is caused by “a combination excessive food intake, lack of physical activity and genetic susceptibility.” (Dr Grace, 2011, p.2). Obesity is rapidly increasing, and it is one of the most serious public health problems worldwide.

  37. Exercise “is an important part of everyday life.” (Jones, 2004, p.4) It is a great way to stay fit and healthy and decrease the chances of obesity. Many people are lazy and should start exercising as “it helps to maitain a healthy lifestyle.” (Smith, 2008, p.14)

  38. According to Professor Logan in his new novel,” The effects of smoking”, “By the year 2020 over 7 billion people will of died from smoking, 30% of which will be under the age of 18 (77). “ and will cost over 50 billon dollars in Medicare.

  39. After publishing, Glen Smithie admitted in his new novel, Obesity,he copied some of Dave Smithies facts in his new novel, Stoutness. “Im so sorry, i couldnt help myself”….”I couldnt think of any of my own facts about fat people.” Later that year Glen Smithie re wrote his novel with his own facts.”Im so happy i was able to re publish my novel, i hope all enjoy my interesting facts about obesity!”

  40. Technology is a device we all use in our day to day life. We all love technology and we all need technology, but do we all need it as much as we think? The answer is yes, we do. No one can live without getting frustrated or angry because they don’t have technology. This device is our life and we all need the technology to help our lives improve and have a better performance for the future.

  41. Obesity is a growing global health issue. “In our modern world with increasingly cheap, high calorie food.” (Globalissues.org, Anup Shah, 1998-2012) Many people enjoy feasting on fast food (take away) or junk food. “Overeating and improper eating will almost always be the first one to spring to mind.” (Health Fitness Club, 2011)

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